Recently I read a novel I really enjoyed except for all those questions the hero and heroine kept thinking in regard to their situation. The story was good, full of heart, faith, and love but the repeated internal questions zapped me right out of the story. I groaned. I almost stopped reading after encountering so many instances of this writing technique. So I decided to check my current first draft. I was astonished to see how many times I had fallen into this same trap which I call “weak” writing.
Sure we occasionally have a question run through our mind. For instance if I get perturbed at my hubby, I might think (or mutter) “I already told him that twenty times.” But I don’t continue with “Why can’t he remember?” “What makes him do this?” “Will I ever be able to change him?” Blah, blah, blah.
Maybe we can get away with asking an occasional internal question in our writing but following it with more than one or overusing the technique is a cop-out. Each of those questions can be rewritten in a more active way, a way that our reader will accept, a way that keeps them rooting for the hero/heroine.
I did a search for question marks. Have you tried that yet? And that is the last question I’ll ask. Good luck!